- When the birds first enter around :50, their flapping is too quick, causing a strange flicker effect that, combined with their general movement, makes them look a little “stuck.”

- at :56, the camera inexplicably bounces vertically; if it’s supposed to be naturalistic camera shake, it’s not consistent with the rest of the piece and therefore doesn’t really work

- the fly-in to the eye at 1:18 feels jarring instead of organic. This is probably explained by the fact that the transitional elements—the pupil and the large circle—are chromatic inversions of each other, causing a “pop” to occur at the moment of transition.

- the camera movements at 1:28 have no easing and move a little too much in relation to the flight of the birds, creating excessive jumping

- the cut at 2:03 is abrupt

- the flock of birds at 2:36 is animated without easing and feels unnatural (“jumpy”)

These are all super small things, of course; I don’t mean to overstate them. I still find the piece to be beautiful. I just thought maybe since you’re a self-described newbie it’d be helpful to see some of these things.

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